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The Indian Fighter by ~hesir:iconhesir:





The Cthuliad: – The Indian Fighter

                                                     ”Oh! woman, woman, woman,
                                                      What have you been and done?
                                                      You have killed the finest butcher
                                                      That ever the sun shone on!”

                                                                - The Three Butchers, Lesley Nelson-Burns


- November 29th, 1864

My tongue probes the sores in my mouth that are beginning to taint the taste of my food. There's blood and something worse crusting on the back of my gums and I think I have another tooth breaking loose. The rainbow-filmed salt meat doesn't help, nor the cheap bourbon mouthwash.

Then there's that sound again.

My eyes crack open, eyelashes gummed together. I try looking at the ceiling of the ragged wall-tent that’s been my home these last six days, trying to get my eyes to focus. Through the sliding grey wisps that cloud my morning vision I can just about make out the bug that woke me with its creaks and clicks, it’s as big as my thumb. I watch as it picks its way through the silk-wrapped corpses of an absentee spider’s pantry. I think about my bitch of a wife. I let the bug live.

I don’t worry none now that she’s gone. When someone’s taken something as what’s yours, or it's been put out of reach, it’s just one thing less to worry about somebody stealing. Indian smarts.

The stale stench of Perique and acrid sweat fills my fly-blown den, but there’s something else too, something I know I should be able to place. The taste in my mouth makes me gag. I try to sit up, but a pain shoots across my back and into my skull like someone’s just towed a worm through my spine. Fuck, how long have I been asleep?

Something brushes by the flap of the tent, rattling the mess tins and horse traces hanging there. I whip upright so fast white flashes pierce my hazy vision and my legs make to fold beneath me. The Le Mat, in my hand all along, reaches out; my gun arm palsied, twitching like the leg on a dying horse, still manages to pull me up and onto my frozen feet.

As I throw back the tent flap I’m already yelling, no words, just the killing yell that accompanies the slash of cavalry sabres and the rise and fall of rifle butts and bayonets, the cries of women and babies.

There’s no-one there, nothing. Just that damn mist from the lake, rolling, drifting across the silent camp, thick as damp wood-smoke, crawling taller than a dog-tent.

A shrill, hysterical voice cries out.

“Where are you!”

As the ragged echoes of the question rebound in the fog I realise it was my own voice.

I look down and see fresh blood on my one un-booted foot, another broken whiskey-jug no doubt. Rainwater and boot-churned filth press into the wound, it’ll be green and stinking in three days.

Back in the tent I stand in front of the broken piece of copper- polished glass that I used as a mirror when I last shaved; and I see what this fucking place, this… this thing, has done to me.  Snow coloured hair where there was black; black shadows where there was none. I’m thirty years old give or take a year, I look like my father’s corpse.

Almost involuntarily the French revolver lifts, dragging my hand with it until they are both level with my aching head. The barrel of the pistol presses into my temple, sliding slightly on the sweat-damp skin until it finds a familiar groove, a place where it has lodged before and raised a mark. The face in the mirror smiles a nervous smile. I feel my eyelid flicker. The gun then pulls itself down and across my jaw, scraping against the stubble. The rough edged metal leaving a red welt where it drags across the pallid flesh. Then sliding over my lip, it breaks through a scab and strikes against my teeth as it enters my mouth. I stare at the reflection, there’s tears rolling down the distorted face trapped between the glass’s jagged edges, but by then I’m beginning to laugh; the barrel rattling against my loosening yellow teeth.

Then the mirror is gone, smashed into even smaller pieces.

Looking down I see the shattered reflections and more cuts on my uncovered foot. One razor-like shard has lodged in something soft hidden behind an upturned table. My head feels light and… and then I recall what the other smell is.

She must have been there for three days. She survived the lynching of her brothers and their friends. She’d probably wished she hadn’t. I’d held her head still, forced her eyes open to watch the bodies jangling on the ropes. Ropes thrown over trees at the waters edge, nine bodies hanging over the water, their kerosene-soaked flesh burning, the eerie light reflected in the mirror-flat surface of the lake reminding me of a picture the company cook had shown me of lanterns in some Chinese village. He’d laughed when he told me how he’s killed the girl he stole it from. I’d bought him a drink and laughed with him.

………

We’d split from our troop. Eleven volunteers including a trapper-guide and his evil looking dogs, all skirmish-hardened fighters, all plunder hungry; our task to follow a mixed pack of Sioux, Cheyenne and Arapaho, into trail-shy territory.

A shopkeeper’s woman in the town went out of her way to point out that there was a couple of negroes with them too.

“Anything to help,” she’d said, her grin full of half-grey teeth and half-hidden malice.

They might not have known it, but the thieves were all dead as soon as they entered the Merl’s Gallo mission church.

A young minister was jostled through an eager, hard-faced crowd of local god-fearing folk and with a voice that wavered in the breeze and our cigar smoke he told us that the misson had been broken in to sometime after dark, three nights before.

His accent shouted that he's been schooled in a wealthy part of New England, his eyes screamed that he wished he hadn't left. Under the gaze of the town's womenfolk he began to stammer as he told us the little more that he knew. The harpies and harridans that had gathered, somehow seeming much larger than their downcast-eyed male counterparts, confirmed the eastener's account with their vigourous nodding and an occasional grunt of assent or a shout of "Heathen animals!" as punctuation.

Once inside it seems the gang had left the church’s silver-plate trinkets and other fancy do-dads on the altar untouched, uninterested, heading straight down to the cellar instead. There they’d had a party to themselves, ransacking the place, eventually making off with a chest holding a number of objects belonging to the old dead priest, father Blake.

“Injun Hokey” one of the older women had told us, “A stone statue”, taken from a local tribe now long gone to their happy hunting ground, killed in some local reprisal, a petty land war, or maybe just plain bloody-minded Christian killing.

“He took it off of them to stop their damned filthy practices in Williamson’s Wood,” another had added.

Filthy practices. The whores that worked the small saloon across from the empty mission leered and flashed us the tools of their trade as we rode out.

Blake should’ve broken that damn statue up with a pick when he had the chance instead of keeping it, but that’s human folly for you, we’re too curious, too precious by half.

So there we where, our orders to chase these poor fuckers to ground, cut them down and then rejoin the main trail heading south into the Colorado Territory; there to join that do-gooder two-gun parson, Chivington and his hired dogs. We were to bring the chest with us and to take what we thought fitting from the fugitives.

It was the 20th of November by the time we caught up with the church-breakers. At least the ones they’d wanted us to catch; an old man, three Arapaho women, two children no more than eleven years old, and the mad Negro.

Even watching my boys make free and bloody with his daughters and grandchildren couldn’t loosen the old man’s tongue. He was a hard bastard that one, the look in his eyes told me he’d seen some murderous shit in his time; but despite what he thought he’d seen, he hadn’t met a fucker like me.

I set to work on him good, and I made him make a hundred different sounds he didn’t think he’d ever make, but he still didn’t tell me where the chest had gone. He died with out me noticing, still working on his bones and tattered flesh.

He was a proud one that old man. Probably thought he’d saved the others. What he didn’t know was that I already knew where the chest was going, the babbling black loon had told me. I’d just wanted a bit of fun of my own.

………

So we’d chased the others here. They hadn’t even bothered hiding the stolen chest. I guess they thought they were home free.

The lake itself wasn’t on any map that I’d been given on leaving Ridgley. I used the “D” guard “Bowie” I’d handmade from an old heavy sabre to prize a rib out of the negro that had made it to the lake; not all the way out, just far enough to hold without breaking it. He told me the lake’s name, but I guess I won’t be adding it to no map.

The night after the lynching was the first night we heard the sounds over the water. A low sound of drums and occasional raised voices, like the crazy moonshine fuelled war-dance chants the drunken braves put on for the tourists in the towns. We stood on the bank of the lake, horse blankets wrapped around ourselves for warmth. Flesher-Marsh, our Norwegian trapper, pointed to a shadow in the mist out across the water. A clump of reeds maybe? An island we’d missed as we rode in? We let it slide. When the fog cleared in the morning we’d find a ford for the horses and burn the island that the mist was hiding blacker than a priest’s cassock.

Yet the next day the mist wouldn’t budge, in fact it snowed. We set out to reconnoitre the lake but after an hour we had to turn back. Coming back in the blizzard we nearly missed the camp altogether. Nat Peaslee didn’t make it back at all. He and his horse went over the edge of a ravine not more than two hundred yards from where we’d made camp. Something else we missed on the way in.

It was that night we heard the other sounds. Like someone pouring empty mussel shells onto a stone floor. I’d heard something similar as a kid. My pa had owned a little strip of dirt in Missouri, and one year out of the blue they’d hit the fields of every farm for fifty miles. Locusts, gods green vengeance, straight outta the Old Testament. “And they shall cover the surface of the land, so that no one shall be able to see the land.” People just hid in their houses. When we eventually got it in our heads to step outside again it was as if some one had taken shears to every field as far as you could see. My ma had laughed at the comical look of the flensed land, but we had a mean winter that year.

And here was that sound again, just louder, the clicks clearer, like something with way too many legs running over the freezing ground beyond the tent canvas.

When we got outside we couldn’t see a damn thing. Within a couple of steps I could feel the mist forming frost on my face and hair, my boots unsteady on the icy ground. I don’t know who screamed first. Suddenly something huge moved off to my right, I lifted the pistol and fired using the larger of the Le Mat’s two barrels, the blast echoed off the mist making it sound like we where stuck in a mountain gorge. Other shots rang out. There was a whine and a clang as the cooking pot two feet to my left was hit. I threw myself to the ground and stayed low while the shots kept coming. Somebody shouted to stop. They’d been hit. They couldn’t see. The gunfire stopped, the last echoes taking with it the fading sound of the eldritch clicking feet.

Crawling through the white fog, melting snow and hoof-raked filth some of us managed to find each other, all of us shaking and spooked, content just to huddle in the lee of a fallen tent.

Todd Thayer was dead, he’d been the one to shout that he’d been hit, and he had been, just not by a bullet.

The early grey light gave us the courage to walk back to find him, it looked like someone had pulled a plough across his belly. It took us less than an hour but longer than it should’ve to realise who else and what else was missing altogether; five men gone, plus all of the horses. Flesher’s hounds were steaming in the feeble morning sun, butchered, unrecognisable. Young Kenny Whateley went mad there and then. Two hours later, after writing a fevered letter to his girl, he cut his own throat in his tent.

The next five nights were the same.

We’d agreed no guns, just edged steel, get close enough to the bastards to see who or what it was we were killing; but the results were the same.

Last night, out of the corner of my eye, I’d seen the shape of something that shouldn’t be walking the land. I swung around, lashing out with the wide bladed “Bowie” I knew as soon as it bit into flesh that I’d made a mistake.

Lanigan died in my arms crying like a babe, praying like a penitent nun, his guts open to the grey sky.

……

That just leaves me and the chest.

The sky is crazy shade of purple, like a bruised cheekbone; the light will hold for another hour at best.

The snow is starting to fall again, gently now, trying to cover a scene that looks like the killing floor of a Chicago abattoir slowly spilling into a kids picture of Christmas.

It’s been nine days since I killed the old man, sixteen hours since I gutted Lanigan, and I’m wondering if it wouldn’t have been better if I’d have just carried on straight to Colorado.

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EDIT: 15th SEPTEMBER... still having trouble finding the right voice for this guy... he's veered from hard-bitten western colloquialism to educated and back again... and back again... Maybe I just need to picture an actor or someone in the role and see how that works? It worked with "Salamander Jack" and picturing Iggy Pop...

Anyway, thanks to all of you who've helped with this so far... your comments have been really useful. I going home now to try and finish the "Sorceress" and "Summoner" sections of this project in time for the FWU comp' deadline tomorrow.

This remains a work in progress towards a larger work called The Cthulhiad. I'd recently (earlier this year) finished an annoted collection of Lovecrafts Wierd Tales... and thought it might be interesting to have a go at writing a set of shorts or fragments based around his Cthulu mythos. But rather than dealing with the scientist who goes mad, trying to see things from the point of you of those who find their connection to the outer dark as a strengthening thing.

I've also always wanted to do something that dealt with the sea... having grown up by it.

Anyway this is just a start... along with [link] [link] [link] and [link] from my scraps.


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I've just re-read this (it's amazing the difference that seeing it on DA makes...

That line should read "corpses of AN absentee spider’s pantry."

"She just better make sure she stays clear of me, ‘specially since she crossed the Union border. That’s reason enough for me to lay her open right there; her and that bible-toting boy of hers." - This needs to go... It's kinda weak.
i like the story, it really flows, and the detail really makes a difference. in relation to content, context and form, the structure does improve the narrative in that it makes the story accessible enough, as well as it should be. i liked that. however, the present time first person takes away from what could be a greatly smooth, self-standing, poetic language use. i mean, the imagery is there and that's like 80% of the work... but in most paragraphs, and specially in the transitions between paragraphs in the beginning, your use of "I" produces these bumps, these cuts, where ideas could flow uninterrupedly. i'm talking about things like, "i think -> i try -> i don't worry" -- it seems scheduled.

like i said though, i enjoyed the story, and i do like your use of language and imagery. good work.

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i like the story, it really flows, and the detail really makes a difference. in relation to content, context and form, the structure does improve the narrative in that it makes the story accessible enough, as well as it should be. i liked that. however, the present time first person takes away from what could be a greatly smooth, self-standing, poetic language use. i mean, the imagery is there and that's like 80% of the work... but in most paragraphs, and specially in the transitions between paragraphs in the beginning, your use of "I" produces these bumps, these cuts, where ideas could flow uninterrupedly. i'm talking about things like, "i think -> i try -> i don't worry" -- it seems scheduled.

like i said though, i enjoyed the story, and i do like your use of language and imagery. good work.

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damn internets!

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Hey thanks for giving this a look... I actually edited this on paper again last night and have put the new edits up... I removed/replaced a couple of the I's here and there... hopefully that will help.

I'm glad you lakid what you read though it's very encouraging.

I might need to alter the profanity to something more of the period, but not being from the states I'm not sure how to research that...

Thanks again,

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Phenominal! (And I have no spell check handy...) Fabulous!

First, I love the setting and the mood you chose for this. Its different, fresh...and the horrific angles are just great. Not quite horror, becuase when we figure out who the narrator is, we're rooting for him to die...or maybe that's just me. I loved the mysterious Indian chest with suspectedly mind-altering (or monster-summoning) powers, I loved the old Indian man who died without the narrator noticing. The details in the beginning really grabbed me and the exposition in the middle made me want to read more. Really keen stuff!

If I could suggest anything about this story, its you could stand to lighten up the writing a little. Trim it, make the prose a little more crisp. For example "The rainbow filmed salt meat doesn't help, nor the cheap bourbon mouthwash." This is a heavy sentance, and I realize that 'rainbow filmed salt meat' is more vivid than 'salt meat' but becuase there were so many qualifiers here, my mind tripped over it and I was distracted from the story.

But, don't get me wrong; there weren't many places here where I was distracted from the story. I wouldn't suggest you change a thing about the story itself--I really enjoyed it!

Thanks for sharing this story! :)
Nothing wrong with it, just a few technicalities that no one really cares about but me because I’m anal-retentive.

rainbow filmed --> rainbow-filmed

I try looking at the ceiling of the ragged wall-tent that’s bin my home these last six days,… --> ‘bin’? Deliberate?

trying to get my eyes to focus.--> Why simply ‘trying to focus’? We know it’s the eyes being spoken of, they were mentioned just one sentence ago.

I let the bug live.--> Don’t ask me why, I worship this line.

I think the dialect fades in an out a bit, now weak, now strong.

it’s just one thing less to worry about somebody else stealing. --> Somehow I don’t like that ‘else’. It jars a bit with the ‘less’ (my personal stupidity, probably), and I feel like you’d do better with ‘another thief coming along’ or something like that.

my gun arm palsied, --> It can go either way, I daresay, but I think present tense is okay here too.

the rise and fall of rifle butts, bayonets --> Why not use ‘and’?

Rain water and boot-churned filth presses into the wound --> Subject(s)-verb agreement: ‘press’

I’m thirty years old give or take a year, I look like my father’s corpse. -->Another very cool line, and I think I mean cool in the “Dude, coo-ool” sense. :)

Smiles a nervous smile --> Eh. Why not keep it simple, with ‘nervously’?

One razor like shard --> razor-like, methinks.

their kerosene soaked flesh --> kerosene-soaked

we were all skirmish hardened fighters, --> skirmish-hardened

plunder hungry --> Not sure, probably ‘plunder-hungry’

their was a couple of negroes with them too --> ‘there’

but they where all dead as soon as they entered --> ‘were’ – and this happens once or twice more in the text. Watch out for them. :)

their filthy damn practices in Williamson’s Wood” she’d said. --> Comma before you close quotes.

Hmm… I like it, everyone likes it. I just think that it needs a little cleaning up. It does seem a bit I-centric at the openings of paragraphs, but it’s not overly obvious and it’s probably okay to be faintly ponderous when you’re telling your own story. :)

In fact, it stands very nicely on its own, so if you give up The Cthuliad in a neurotic-writer fit this can still stay. :)

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This is great... You've been a big help as always... I'll make some of those changes this evening, thanks... Glad you liked it too...

I've got to say it was kind of fun playing the bad guy with this one...

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I always find it hard to be normal with my heroes, actually. I always want to make them mean, and I can't do that without making them look like bitches in a Mills and Boon story - most of my central heroes are women.

But yeah, sometimes it might be fun.

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